Roo 2

Sorry I double-posted, Serena! My computer was being a baby! :D

Aloha, Serena! It’s me, Roo! :smt039 Get ready for the critique of lifetime! First of all, I’d like to congratulate you---you said this was your first attempt at writing a ...

Aloha, Serena! It’s me, Roo! :smt039 Get ready for the critique of lifetime! First of all, I’d like to congratulate you---you said this was your first attempt at writing a ...

Thanks both of you for reviewing! :*

Preface On my fifth birthday, my brand new bunk bed collapsed. On my lungs. Of course, I was immediately rushed away in an ambulance. And despite the EMT's pinging machines ...

Hello. Interesting beginning, you have a lot going with these two characters that makes the reader want to know more, I'm very intrigued with them and the world that they ...

Hey, I’m Roo! So far, your story sounds pretty interesting, and I’m definitely wanting to read more when you post it. (That’s a subtle hint for you to definitely PM ...

Hi Wizardwrite! (Is that what you what us to call you, or do you have another nickname in mind?) I'm Roo and I'd love to be your friend! (Actually, I ...

Hello Vonika! I'm Roo. :) Wow, that sounds so cool! I also love art and literature, I come from a family of artists (storyboard artist-oil painter-cartoonist dad, fiber artist mom, ...

Alright, alright, there was some stuff I liked about this chapter. You kept your voice very constant and unfailing throughout the whole piece, you kept your writing as nice and ...

Okay, great! I’m very, very interested so far and it sounds like you’ve got a really fresh, unique idea! This is only your second try at writing? Wow! I’m impressed!! ...

Hey Twilightgirl! (Is that what you want to go by, or do you have another nickname in mind?) I'm Roo! :D It sounds like you're a Twilight fan, and I'm ...

Hi Sslama! I'm Roo. :) Winter covered groups, and trust me, they're lots of fun, plus you can join as many as you want! I suggest the group 'Save Energy, ...

'Ash' is a cool title! Or what if you altered it a little bit ('Ashes' maybe...?) or incorporated it into the title, so that it wasn't really like her name, ...

I'm sorry--I don't have time for a proper critique or review, so all I can say is: wow. Great! I'm so intrigued, I can't wait till you post more, you've ...